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Chris
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Posted - 03/07/2009 : 03:10:44
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I've been working on a project for a few weeks now interpreting Dante's Divine Comedy as Haiku and Haiku-inspired prose (kind of a pidgin Haibun) I'm on Canto 12 of Inferno and taking a break perhaps I'll post some of the cantos here in the mean time if you're interested you can read a few excerpts here www.wiresource.blogspot.com
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Chris
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Posted - 04/01/2009 : 01:57:19
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So far I'm doing pretty good with Inferno. I've done 19 Cantos so far which means I'm nearing the home stretch on Volume 1. In the interest of getting some feedback I'm transcribing Canto 17 here. Once I've finished writing Inferno I will have to type the whole thing out onto my computer and include summaries before each Canto (which is traditional for this work) and send it to some folks who's opinions I value when it comes to Dante Scholarship and then with any amendments it's off to publishers and I get to start wall papering my home with rejection slips (or so I expect).
Here goes.
Canto 17
Summary: Virgil and Dante have reached the inner edge of the Circle of Violence. As Virgil talks Greyon, the demon of Fraud, into flying them down to the next level of Hell Dante wanders off a little way and encounters some of the Usurers, big bankers who lent money at interest and gained in wealth at the expense of the impoverished.
The thing's human face the look of an honest man fraud's perversity
behind the kind face the body of a serpent hairy fore-arms, claws
it's complex patterns draw distracted eyes to flesh a scorpion's tail
this is our way down from now on our path gets worse my heart sinks still more
I turn, wander off not too far, I hear Virgil talking to Greyon
a small group of men curled up and bent over none I recognize
purses 'round their necks hands fly up and down, no help eyes fixed on their loot
Symbols on their bags Citibank, AIG, Banks That ruined the world
a banker glances Goldman Sachs will be here soon many more will fall
Virgil calls me back Astride it he bidds me come only sit in front
Greyon is upset and his tail is poison tipped I must climb aboard
swimming through the air slowly, to the right we fly I keep my eyes closed
We land in safety the angry monster flies off faster than he came
I hope this isn't too groovy for a forum dealing with psychosis. The Inferno is a very intense and unrelenting poem but it is only the first third of a major epic of Western poetry as well as social and religious commentary. After Dante the Pilgrim and his guide Virgil escape hell they arrive on the shores of Mount Purgatory and begin their upward climb towards Heaven. I'm looking forward to doing those next two books. |
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stile
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Posted - 04/01/2009 : 15:31:52
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Hi Chris, I am not well versed in poetry, even though I do own a copy of Dante's Inferno, I read it while having ECT and so my memory of it is wiped clean. The only thing I remember is that it was a challenging poem.
I say this so you know that I am not a good one to consult on poetry critiquing. But I thought what you wrote was brilliant. I like the fact that you make the story come to life vividly with an economy of words (necessary in a haiku but well done regardless). I also like the fact that it is highly readable and comprehensible where the original is, if I remember correctly, rather convoluted and difficult to understand.
Also, I like the contemporary references to the bailout scandal, it gives it a present context, and that is great. Overall i really enjoyed it, and if I was going to read Dante, I would want to read your version so yeah I would buy a poem like this.
-stile
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FLMgirl
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Posted - 04/01/2009 : 21:50:25
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Hi Chris,
I also, like what you have done. Very Impressive. That is alot of work. It makes me want to read more. As Stile says, "it is highly readable". I also like that it doesn't make me feel like a dummy reading it. It is precise, fresh, and has drawn me in.
Keep working! I look forward to a finished product, with music!!!
-Leigh
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Chris
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Posted - 04/01/2009 : 23:12:21
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Thanks FLMgirl,
I'm still not certain how the music and the poetry will combine, if I'l read the cantos over top of the music sort of like an audio book or whether I'll release the music as ambient instrumental stuff that is only inspired by the work. We'll see how it unfolds I guess. The whole project is a bit of a surprise.
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Zebra
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Posted - 04/02/2009 : 16:59:02
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Hey Chris,
I like your poem. I went to see a poet recently called Joolz who puts her poems to rock music, she is really good.
Take care,
Zebra. |
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sopater
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Posted - 02/27/2010 : 21:29:20
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^^Fun read Chris! I read The Inferno And Purgatory, but I've yet to read Paradiso. I'd like to see an animated version of the Divine Comedy. |
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Chris
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Posted - 02/27/2010 : 22:40:22
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I hear there making a Dante's Inferno videogame. ugh.
animated dante could be cool though.
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Jonathan90125
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Posted - 08/12/2013 : 06:58:28
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Chris that's really good, I only just found your stuff here. I'm impressed. keep going.
Blessed are the peacemakers:- Jesus Christ
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